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So I made a pretty big jump in my paragraph. I changed it so that it was the development of white lies. In other words, I talked about how it went from showing that the characters were superficial and how those lies developed into being necessary for everyday life. (Plus the ideas you both game me about being un-recognizable and how everyone uses it in society.) Does that sound ok?
Questions: Ok, so I started to write my beginning thesis, but I was wondering.. 1. Do I need to include the title and the author because right before my paragraph it already says it? I didn't want to be repetitive, but I wasn't sure if it needed to be included. 2. When we say our quote how are we going to reference it to the book? For example: (Algernon, P.8) or just (P.8) 3. Is my topic to broad? I wasn't sure? Now that I read it I am not sure if it is ok or not? Last question :)
4. How do I make this commentary instead of plot summary? "Instead, lane does the same maneuver and comes up with his own excuse. No guilt is passed between the two, but the event is quickly forgotten and the subject forgotten and the subject never touched upon." I am talking the sandwiches and how there lies are un-noticed..
Thanks.. Sorry for all the questions :) See you Monday
Yeah, the idea for your paragraph sounds pretty good and i think will go with the point we are trying to proove a little better.
ReplyDelete1. I'm actually not sure about the title and author i was wondering the same thing, maybe you sould email it to yourself and we could ask her on Monday and make necessary changes in class. :)
2. I just said (Wilde then the page number) like we did for To Kill a Mockingbird. Again we can make necessary changes in class but for this one I dont think it matters too much.
3.Ummmmm, I dont think your topic is too broad. Maybe you could go back to the intro (I don't have it in fromnt of me right now) and you could look at the last sentance (the one we added in class) and just pull it a little closer to that i dea, but i think it's pretty good how it is.
4.Ok, so I think the second sentance is fine you might just want to not say subject twice but it's fine as far as plot summary is concerned. I would say make that your first sentance of commentary. (You might have to reword it a bit)For your second sentance try to tie it back to your thesis, explain how this event going un-noticed says something about the characters or about human nature. For example, explain how Algernon didnt even hesitate on this lie and how it just rolled off his tongue, something like that.
Hope this helped :)